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By Jack Joseph Smith
By Jack Joseph Smith
Original Scan
AI Interpretation
Third pass of 'A POEM TO A PAINTER' (cf. pages 24, 58), retaining the BEFORE / IT ALL / HAPPENED structure.
This version works as a convergence point for the revision trio. It preserves the tripartite structure and the 'worn out hobo's tie' simile, making it useful for seeing how the poem stabilizes across repeated typings.
'A POEM TO A PAINTER' runs in three typed blocks headed 'BEFORE:', 'IT ALL:', and 'HAPPENED:', moving from a near-death vision of a brain cut 'raw' on 'scalpel sharp surgical stone', through drunken, tearful memory 'from doors of closing taverns', to men 'blessing man's soul in the wild / of the black alley'.
Each block is a single breathless sentence, so the syntax itself enacts the descent 'into down below trailing upon / twisted memories'. The simile of tears running 'like fading colors of a worn out hobo's tie' ties the painter's palette to the book's vagrant speaker. The close sets the false public honor of 'wreaths' on tombs against the private vow 'with art I deepen my own'.