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Louise's practiced indifference and the toughness of crossing swords lead into a declaration that no one across the stars has seemed as true as Glenther.

The draft turns social hardness into fidelity. Its damaged typing and repeated portrait details make the final claim feel worked toward rather than polished: despite uncertainty, Louise becomes the measure of truth.

An untitled revision says 'The hardest thing about Louise was she acting as if not to care', calls crossing swords 'tough', says an art for all has existed in America 'sence the depression', repeats the nails and surgeon lines, and ends that no one 'across the stars' has ever been 'as true as Lauise Glenther'.

The draft reuses page 7's portrait but reframes it around Louise's guarded indifference and ends in fidelity. Its visible typewriter corrections, including 'truth' and 'true' typed over other letters, make the declaration feel worked at, which suits a poem about how hard she was to reach.