By Jack Joseph Smith
Original Scan
AI Interpretation
The speaker places the addressee low on sand beside a sea shell and the shadow of a vanished hawk, then rules out going back. The final revision changes low to close.
Landscape and proximity frame an address whose destination is not explained. The replacement changes the closing measure without resolving what the addressee approaches.
'Close' places the speaker 'Flat on the sand', at 'the lowest you can get to the shAdow', says 'You can not go back / to theones who give in', and ends 'Thinking subtle / As CLosE as that might be'.
The handwritten CLosE replaces a cancelled low, turning the ending from lowness to nearness; the case of the handwritten letters remains provisional.